Trobadora ([info]trobadora) wrote in [info]mcshep_match,
2007-09-06 19:10:00
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TEAM ANGST: Flesh and Blood, "The Experiment"

Title: The Experiment
Author: [info]lunasky (interview)
Team: Angst
Prompt: Flesh and Blood
Pairing(s): McKay/Sheppard
Rating: NC-17
Warnings: Graphic violence
Summary: They wake up to find themselves in a grey room. A plain, grey room with no windows or doors.

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The Experiment

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[info]_bettina_

September 6 2007, 20:27:55 UTC 4 years ago

Wow, this was just fantastic!

[info]lunasky

September 13 2007, 02:34:43 UTC 4 years ago

Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

[info]khyrra

September 6 2007, 20:34:22 UTC 4 years ago

Wow, really nice twist! Very cool.

[info]lunasky

September 13 2007, 02:35:04 UTC 4 years ago

Thanks. Glad to hear it worked. :)

[info]bironic

September 6 2007, 23:21:07 UTC 4 years ago

Hee! You went there! I wish I could remember the trigger point -- maybe towards the beginning when they're still wondering about how they can't remember much -- or maybe later -- but at some point as I was reading, I started thinking about doing a story where John and Rodney turned out to be clones and not the real John and Rodney, but they didn't know it, a la Philip K. Dick. And then it came true! And then it kept going! Fabulous.

[info]lunasky

September 13 2007, 02:35:51 UTC 4 years ago

Thanks. I'm glad it didn't disappoint :)

[info]sweeneybird

September 6 2007, 23:39:17 UTC 4 years ago

This is what the 'Tin Men' episode of SG1 aspired to - you did a brilliant job here, particularly with giving Asurans angst. Well played!

[info]lunasky

September 13 2007, 02:39:26 UTC 4 years ago

Thanks! I've never seen that ep--I've only watched SG-1 sporadically, but now I'll have to check it out. I know the idea's not a new one, but I'm glad to hear it worked here :)

[info]cordeliadelayne

September 7 2007, 00:42:52 UTC 4 years ago

This was so good. I loved the twist, for once I didn't see it coming at all. Fabulous.

[info]lunasky

September 13 2007, 02:40:57 UTC 4 years ago

Thanks. :) I'm glad it wasn't too obvious right from the start.

[info]chaps1870

September 7 2007, 01:20:23 UTC 4 years ago

Very interesting. I like that it worked right up until the very end.

[info]lunasky

September 13 2007, 02:42:21 UTC 4 years ago

Thanks!

[info]argosy

September 7 2007, 01:52:45 UTC 4 years ago

Woo-Hoo! So good. I'm in awe of the way you built suspense here. Every word was compelling. The last part of the story was brutal but amazing.

[info]lunasky

September 13 2007, 02:42:51 UTC 4 years ago

Hee! Thanks sweetie. I'm glad you liked it.

[info]madeline871

September 7 2007, 02:43:03 UTC 4 years ago

This was really good. I loved the ending- very unexpected!

[info]lunasky

September 13 2007, 02:44:58 UTC 4 years ago

Thanks. :)

[info]steammmpunk

September 7 2007, 02:43:52 UTC 4 years ago

Do Androids Dream of Electric Sheep?

Wow, that was really interesting. And hits all my kinks -- Android angst! Wonderfully done.

[info]lunasky

September 13 2007, 02:48:08 UTC 4 years ago

Re: Do Androids Dream of Electric Sheep?

Thanks :) It's good to hear that it worked.

[info]mcalex22

September 7 2007, 12:16:35 UTC 4 years ago

This is incredible! I love it - we spend most of the story wondering what is going on and the reveal was very exciting. The alternate John and Rodney's plan to overthow their "creators" were amazing.

I really enjoyed this. I so did not see it coming! :D

another big plus for team angst!

[info]lunasky

September 13 2007, 02:50:30 UTC 4 years ago

Thanks! I'm glad to hear the twist at the end worked. After reading it over and over, it was all a blur to me by the end.

[info]mercury973

September 7 2007, 17:05:05 UTC 4 years ago

I totally did not see the twist coming. VERY well done. Very satisfying finish.

[info]lunasky

September 13 2007, 02:51:25 UTC 4 years ago

Thanks. I'm glad to hear the ending worked since that's always the part that gives me the biggest grief.

[info]sageness

September 8 2007, 08:07:21 UTC 4 years ago

What a fantastic answer to this prompt! A great twist on the locked-in-a-cell-together trope. :D

[info]lunasky

September 13 2007, 02:52:57 UTC 4 years ago

Thanks! I'm glad it managed to surprise a little.

[info]gblvr

September 8 2007, 18:41:00 UTC 4 years ago

Wow - that was an amazingly cool twist. I love that even in the end, 'John' is still not sure he can let himself get close to 'Rodney', and that Rodney's yes, please, let's have more sex!

[info]lunasky

September 13 2007, 02:54:21 UTC 4 years ago

Hee. Thanks! Rodney always has his own set of priorities, doesn't he? *g*

[info]kathgrr

September 9 2007, 10:57:37 UTC 4 years ago

That blindsided me in a GREAT way. I absolutely did not see that coming. Wonderful.

[info]lunasky

September 13 2007, 03:02:52 UTC 4 years ago

Thank you! I'm glad to know the twist worked :)

[info]lavvyan

September 9 2007, 12:30:21 UTC 4 years ago

Nifty. I totally didn't see that coming, and you managed to capture especially John's emotions incredibly well.

[info]lunasky

September 13 2007, 03:04:41 UTC 4 years ago

Thanks! I'm glad to know that John's characterization worked. :)

[info]kormantic

September 9 2007, 21:38:17 UTC 4 years ago

creepy and clever

Nicely done.

[info]lunasky

September 13 2007, 03:05:00 UTC 4 years ago

Re: creepy and clever

Thanks!

[info]jade_dragoness

September 9 2007, 22:22:58 UTC 4 years ago

Wow... wow... serious wow.

I really want to read a sequel!

♥

[info]lunasky

September 13 2007, 03:06:31 UTC 4 years ago

Aw, thanks :) I have to admit, I'm really bad when it comes to writing sequels, but I do imagine replicator!John and Rodney causing some problems for the Asurans. :)

[info]sobelle

September 10 2007, 05:14:41 UTC 4 years ago

I didn't see it coming at all... (and there was even a moment when I thought it was gonna be an "aliens made them do it" scenario)... so that it worked itself out to be as amazingly angsty with Sheppard and McKay still being who they are, just replicators... is totally awesome... and unsettling... and brilliant!

[info]lunasky

September 13 2007, 03:07:26 UTC 4 years ago

Wow. Thanks! I'm glad it managed to surprise you and still work in a believable way. :)

[info]sobelle

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[info]aurora_84

September 10 2007, 22:35:21 UTC 4 years ago

This was just brilliant, wow.

[info]lunasky

September 13 2007, 03:07:53 UTC 4 years ago

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[info]briar_pipe

September 11 2007, 03:36:35 UTC 4 years ago

This was awesome in so many ways. I love the way it spun back on itself so the ending was a complete surprise and yet made so much sense. Also loved the way the other Asurans totally failed to understand what it meant to think like John and Rodney.

[info]lunasky

September 13 2007, 03:09:06 UTC 4 years ago

Thanks! I think you're totally right. The Experiment was doomed to fail because I don't think there's any way for John and Rodney to give them what they want and still be essentially who they are. :)

[info]emeraldteal

September 12 2007, 05:57:47 UTC 4 years ago

Loved the twist and the John angst :) And in the end they're still gonna be together, wreaking havoc wherever they go. Yaaay!

[info]lunasky

September 13 2007, 03:10:21 UTC 4 years ago

Thanks. I'm glad you liked it. I had to go with the possibility of a happy ending :)

[info]amothea

September 12 2007, 23:18:21 UTC 4 years ago

I loved this story and the ending was perfect.

[info]lunasky

September 13 2007, 03:10:54 UTC 4 years ago

Thank you! I'm glad to know it worked. :)

[info]kyuuketsukirui

September 13 2007, 01:01:31 UTC 4 years ago

Neat idea.

[info]lunasky

September 13 2007, 03:11:21 UTC 4 years ago

Thanks :)

[info]bluebrocade

September 13 2007, 06:43:34 UTC 4 years ago

Great story! Very original. I enjoyed it a lot.

[info]lunasky

September 14 2007, 10:29:05 UTC 4 years ago

Thank you! :)

[info]springwoof

October 8 2007, 02:01:49 UTC 4 years ago

I'm glad I finally got to read this story. It was fascinating! I didn't see the twist near the end, but it's as inevitable as it was clever. An SGA version of "Tin Man"! with a lot of the same dilemmas...

I liked the emotional growth of both characters and how they kept saving each other's sanity as well as each other's lives. very cool!

[info]lunasky

October 8 2007, 02:38:22 UTC 4 years ago

Thanks for the comment. I'm glad you enjoyed the fic. :) I've never actually seen the Tin Men ep--though I've been meaning to since someone mentioned it. It's good to know the twist worked.
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