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TEAM ANGST: Exile, "Down to Earth"

Title: Down to Earth
Author: [info]yolsaffbridge (interview)
Team: Angst
Prompt: Exile
Pairing(s): McKay/Sheppard
Rating: R
Warnings: Spoilers up through the end of season three. Also, there's angst.
Summary: "I mean, Colonel, no more ATA gene. No more advanced medical procedures, no more puddlejumpers, no more space gates, no more Super Chair Weapon, no more pretty much anything."

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Down to Earth

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  • 21 comments

[info]the_emef

September 4 2007, 18:32:23 UTC 4 years ago

SO DYSFUNCTIONAL

oh my god, this story is so depressing and I really loved it

[info]lavvyan

September 4 2007, 19:26:37 UTC 4 years ago

Marines: 126.
Athosians willing and able to fight, according to Teyla: 37.
Ronon: 1.

*rofl*

I liked this story very much, the way John defines almost any and every thing by way of flying. The ending in particular was a nice twist, giving him the gene again but taking away what made it special. I felt that last bit with Rodney was a bit rushed, though, the resolution too sudden. But that might just be me being tired. :)

[info]quickthorne

September 5 2007, 05:21:03 UTC 4 years ago

I actually liked the rushed aspect at the end - John is doing what he does best: repressing and substituting. He loses Atlantis, so he goes to Rodney. He gets the gene again and drops him without even thinking about it. And when he realizes that he really has lost Atlantis? He tries to drown himself in Rodney again. I think that for John this was the only way it could have ended.

[info]amothea

September 4 2007, 20:44:46 UTC 4 years ago

I liked this story.

[info]shara50

September 5 2007, 00:37:56 UTC 4 years ago

A very interesting read, thanks:)

[info]gblvr

September 5 2007, 01:42:24 UTC 4 years ago

Oh John, you are so fucked up.... I feel for Rodney, who doesn't even realize that John has to convince himself that Rodney means more to him than the gene. :-(

[info]mecurtin

September 5 2007, 02:46:36 UTC 4 years ago

Now *that*'s what I mean by angst! Bitter bitter chocolate to the end. yummmm.

[info]merelyn

September 5 2007, 04:10:21 UTC 4 years ago

Oh, John.

[info]quickthorne

September 5 2007, 05:15:55 UTC 4 years ago

That last line just killed me. Oh god, John. Exile, indeed.

(Also, hee: Ronon: 1. Awesome!)

[info]bluebrocade

September 5 2007, 09:38:51 UTC 4 years ago

Oh, wow. Terrific story. Excellent, original idea.

[info]kyuuketsukirui

September 5 2007, 09:45:56 UTC 4 years ago

Interesting idea. I liked it.

[info]argosy

September 6 2007, 23:22:26 UTC 4 years ago

Ronon:1 is made of awesomeness. I enjoyed this story a lot.

[info]lilyfarfalla

September 8 2007, 23:26:59 UTC 4 years ago

John here is so emotionally unavailable -- I really don't know what to make of him. When he sat down and did all of his paperwork, I was terrified for him, but....oh, I'm still so angry at how he used Rodney, and his attitude throughout....

I loved Elizabeth's and Zelenka's responses. "I expected more from you, John." is awesome. But nothing seems to really wake him up--it's strange and upsetting.

(All of this is meant as praise! Just.....praise of depicting a really messed-up John.)

[info]aurora_84

September 8 2007, 23:37:29 UTC 4 years ago

Oh man, this was hurty in the best possible way. And I really like the premise - very original.

[info]in_interval

September 9 2007, 01:32:09 UTC 4 years ago

Wow, what an interesting concept. It makes sense that John would go into shock after losing the gene and that no one else quite got where he was coming from. And his insensitivity to everyone and everything but what serves his own purpose makes sense too. Very nice.

[info]sobelle

September 10 2007, 05:26:29 UTC 4 years ago

Definitely got the angst going on... and the dysfunction too... and you nailed it good... serious angst for Mr. Repression for his lost and partial re-gain yet still thick as a brick in the emotional aspect... great job!

[info]maryavatar

September 12 2007, 18:48:51 UTC 4 years ago

Tentacle machine? Hee! My brain is now stuck in The Bad Place.

[info]zelempa

September 14 2007, 19:46:39 UTC 4 years ago

I love "I lied," and you know it. :)

[info]ceitie

September 16 2007, 03:52:01 UTC 4 years ago

I adore your John here, because as depressing as they are, I think his reactions are pitch-perfect to how John would actually behave in this situations. Because John's protective and brave and all that, but he's still just a guy who can be selfish a lot of the time, and more importantly, he's a guy who would choose to live in Antarctica rather than give up flying.

[info]aliciamasters

September 22 2007, 17:07:37 UTC 4 years ago

I really enjoyed the story! This hollow John was sad, for all that he was in character; so oblivious of everything around him except his own needs, and never really connecting with his emotions. This was terrific.

[info]creascendo

November 30 2008, 17:17:41 UTC 3 years ago

Ronon: 1.

I love that Ronon gets his very own category and John creating an "Oh Dear Lord How Did I Not Get Fired For Not Doing This" pile. I really enjoyed John's voice and the progression from inserting silliness into his inner monologue to acknowledging constant ache of not flying.
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